tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post9123276263989124662..comments2023-07-06T02:35:12.954-07:00Comments on Mystery and Suspense with Charles Forgues: Hollow Point - Chapter 1, Part 1Charles Forgueshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14699237849644235916noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-25075333832707410192010-09-10T07:03:06.238-07:002010-09-10T07:03:06.238-07:00I'd like to find out what happens next.I'd like to find out what happens next.SandyG265https://www.blogger.com/profile/11715078006688996968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-28917877443445112412010-08-09T15:03:02.605-07:002010-08-09T15:03:02.605-07:00Surely he doesn't do it - this would be a crap...Surely he doesn't do it - this would be a crappy place to end!L. Diane Wolfehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06425864276166334896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-45160111030260771292010-08-09T12:52:15.295-07:002010-08-09T12:52:15.295-07:00Augh! I seem to be torturing myself today, readin...Augh! I seem to be torturing myself today, reading excerpts of stories that I want and don't have!The Yard Bardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03613458143059218286noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-10288992552125425972010-08-08T20:32:14.332-07:002010-08-08T20:32:14.332-07:00I was uncertain whether the rat was a human rat at...I was uncertain whether the rat was a human rat at first, but I think I worked it out. Others were also confused so you probably need to edit for clarity here. Enjoyable entry..:)<br /><br />I'm late and I know now my link didn't work. I hope you'll pop by and read mine. I became a follower also..:)Denise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-62526890620162388572010-08-08T10:05:06.115-07:002010-08-08T10:05:06.115-07:00I like the small things thrown in--the relationshi...I like the small things thrown in--the relationship with "Father" so-and-so...The rat question--real or imagined?...the mention of Sylvia, but NOT as someone he would leave behind.<br /><br />Lots of questions to answer! Thank you for sharing!<br /><br />Michele<br /><a href="http://southerncitymysteries.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">SouthernCityMysteries</a>JournoMichhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11170364981958685438noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-70073197912474965972010-08-08T07:21:31.459-07:002010-08-08T07:21:31.459-07:00This makes me wonder if he's actually talking ...This makes me wonder if he's actually talking to the rat or if he's hallucinating - very interesting start.Mary E Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13119298615414367828noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-55221493246108638032010-08-07T20:29:26.354-07:002010-08-07T20:29:26.354-07:00oh WOW! this was really, really unique and intere...oh WOW! this was really, really unique and interesting! makes me want to read more!<br />excellent!vic caswell https://www.blogger.com/profile/01218698236837610704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-13496614501021566632010-08-07T14:29:41.465-07:002010-08-07T14:29:41.465-07:00Lots of questions about what his work has been...
...Lots of questions about what his work has been...<br /><br />bruFebruary Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01078037856070486022noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-87351015350582161832010-08-07T13:36:15.075-07:002010-08-07T13:36:15.075-07:00A riveting first chapter! I was intrigued by the ...A riveting first chapter! I was intrigued by the entire scenario and was left with plenty of questions that would urge me to turn the page and read on. Best of luck with the project!<br /><br />Looking forward to reading more from you :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01899768909313326172noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-48225425676737150152010-08-07T13:18:25.758-07:002010-08-07T13:18:25.758-07:00Great dialogue between the rat and the man - well ...Great dialogue between the rat and the man - well done :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-13980418770265119062010-08-07T13:06:59.108-07:002010-08-07T13:06:59.108-07:00I'm not sure what interested me most? The sui...I'm not sure what interested me most? The suicidal man discussing suicide with his pet rat or what this guys job may be. <br /><br />I really enjoyed the back and forth with the rodent and how much this guy is messed up.<br /><br />Cool piece!Nicole Murrayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09605448429334684845noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-43252236921061535542010-08-07T13:04:33.112-07:002010-08-07T13:04:33.112-07:00Great hook! It really sets a scene and poses quest...Great hook! It really sets a scene and poses questions without leaving us in utter confusion. Nothing like a sleep-deprived detox to bring the voice out of a pet, eh?Will Burkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10158149526658590324noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-46288974627851167172010-08-07T12:20:17.647-07:002010-08-07T12:20:17.647-07:00Interesting and riveting scene. Justin has a point...Interesting and riveting scene. Justin has a point : 'the effects of alcohol' can be edited away.<br /><br />Oh, if all our missteps could be so easily edited away, right?<br /><br />Mark Twain had a similar experience in a San Francisco hotel room, whose bill has spiraled out towards the stars and his prospects had dwindled to microscopic levels.<br /><br />You did a great job, RolandRoland D. Yeomanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00338410857990551352noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-50451241171357852792010-08-07T11:57:14.711-07:002010-08-07T11:57:14.711-07:00Several interesting things going on, here. Is the ...Several interesting things going on, here. Is the talking rat real or imagined? Will the MC actually do what he's threatening to do, and then there are all those questions--why?<br /><br />Nice job. Thanks for sharing.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09687047513163296827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-91480601971864263312010-08-07T10:48:14.693-07:002010-08-07T10:48:14.693-07:00Hi Charles,
Thanks for stopping by my entry. The ...Hi Charles,<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by my entry. The best thing going for you in this piece is definitely the dialogue. The scene is also built well, but you might do your writing some justice by cleaning up extraneous words. The one I picked was, "I'd quit drinking five days ago in order to clear my mind of the effects of alcohol." Here, you can cut "of the effects of alcohol." It's extra. Otherwise, thanks for the read! It's an interesting start.<br /><br />See you around!Justin W. Parentehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05951018201906897315noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-81559172686903206222010-08-07T10:41:20.574-07:002010-08-07T10:41:20.574-07:00Interesting - it leaves me very curious, wanting t...Interesting - it leaves me very curious, wanting to know more. Thanks for sharing!! :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-30347030721862747612010-08-07T10:26:59.571-07:002010-08-07T10:26:59.571-07:00Thanks for stopping by my blog, and for sharing yo...Thanks for stopping by my blog, and for sharing your entry with us. :)<br /><br />Happy weekend,<br />LolaLola Sharphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14394765053485642935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2971156755228151541.post-23565663930150769322010-08-04T08:58:11.667-07:002010-08-04T08:58:11.667-07:00This was an interesting start. Definitely grabbed...This was an interesting start. Definitely grabbed my attention and tweaked my curiosity. :)DL Hammonshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02007260062331783715noreply@blogger.com